I'm trying to figure out what most of this has to do with Jason. His name is the title of the book, but it seems like it's interminable relationship talk and Anita's adventures in girl on girl action, with a little Nathaniel thrown in for good measure.
Also, Anita talks like a 13 year old girl. It throws me out of the story every time she spouts a 'yay' or 'favoritest' or talks like a lolcat. It just doesn't jibe with her bad ass, vampire killing, US Marshal depiction. Avoiding words for genitals is part of this. To me, even phrasing things like 'ate her out' instead of describing the act sounds too crude for the way she writes. She really needs a course on how to write actual erotica.
So much talk. I'd be thoroughly turned off if someone I was about to sleep with had to nail everything out prior to getting down. LKH needs to work on 'show, don't tell'. I think some of it is LKH thinking her readers are stupid, and cannot visualize a scene unless she spells out exactly who's going to be doing what to whom and what that signifies in their relationship, etc. This applies to all the lipstick logistics as well.
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Date: 2014-12-06 06:36 pm (UTC)Also, Anita talks like a 13 year old girl. It throws me out of the story every time she spouts a 'yay' or 'favoritest' or talks like a lolcat. It just doesn't jibe with her bad ass, vampire killing, US Marshal depiction. Avoiding words for genitals is part of this. To me, even phrasing things like 'ate her out' instead of describing the act sounds too crude for the way she writes. She really needs a course on how to write actual erotica.
So much talk. I'd be thoroughly turned off if someone I was about to sleep with had to nail everything out prior to getting down. LKH needs to work on 'show, don't tell'. I think some of it is LKH thinking her readers are stupid, and cannot visualize a scene unless she spells out exactly who's going to be doing what to whom and what that signifies in their relationship, etc. This applies to all the lipstick logistics as well.
I miss jeans-and-Nikes!Anita too.